It is important to be bothered because if we are not bothered by anything there will be no change in the world. People who need help in the world will not be able to get that help and nobody will care for anything anymore. People who need medical attention will not get that if people don’t get bothered by anything anymore. If people were not bothered anymore homeless people would not get any support by other people. People would starve looking for food in some countries without anyone caring or getting bothered about it. If a flight is crashing or a boat is sinking and they need a rescue they might not get rescued if nobody was bothered by it. We would have no military to defend our country if nobody was bothered anymore. Now that you have read this I hope you will be bothered by these things in life.
I like your reasoning and how you gave a problem as an example
ReplyDeleteSomething that you could do next time is toward the beggining the response it felt a little repetative but it is still good.
One connection I made was that I felt the same reasons when I was typing mine.
One question I have is that have you ever been bothered by anything.
Great use of examples. They really helped convey the point of the paragraph. I agree with Rohit that it felt a bit repetitive towards the beginning, but the rest of it totally made up for it.
ReplyDeleteYou had nice examples and your ending was good and I agree with Brendan and Rohit
ReplyDeleteDeclan i really liked your examples and i also agree with brendan and rohit that it was kinda reptitve in the first few senteces.
ReplyDeleteI really like your answer. You did a nice job explaining why people need to be bothered.
ReplyDeleteI really like your answer. You did a nice job explaining why people need to be bothered.
ReplyDeleteI like your examples you are using, and i agree to what you are saying.
ReplyDeletenice job i agree with your answers with rohit good job on explaining why you should be bothered
ReplyDeletegreat writing I can really connect to your piece. Nice job on explaining why to be bothered. Do you think there's anything you can do to improve your piece?
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